What do you think of my resume?

[enz660]

Im a poor college kid whos lookin for a low end personal trainer job, yes, I recieved a cheapo ExpertRating Certification but I believe it will get me a job that will at LEAST pay about 10-15 dollars/hour which is what i'm looking for. I spent a lot of time reading up on how to make resume's and finally made one.

I was hoping you personal trainers out there could give your professional opinion on how it looks, suggest what I could change, etc etc..

Thank You.

ps, yes, I added this website to it
maybe bad idea, maybe good, share your thoughts.


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[nickmanzoni]

hold that thought.... two cents coming tomorrow.

[D1-FS-19]

Too much fluff in my opinion. You are also very vague with your personal training experience. What helped me big time was including references that were former clients.

[enz660]

Too much fluff in my opinion. You are also very vague with your personal training experience. What helped me big time was including references that were former clients.

I read up that references should be placed on a separate paper and shown only if asked for. How can I be more specific with the training?

[mydamnself]

Wait until you finish your NASM before you start training people. You're really getting off on the wrong foot as a trainer. The internet is an amazing thing. If you start off with a fly by night cert in CT at 19 and have a string of dis-satisfied clients, things pop up in a google search 5 years later in GA. There are other jobs you can get that will pay better and won't make my industry look bad.

[Gronnie]

Wait until you finish your NASM before you start training people. You're really getting off on the wrong foot as a trainer. The internet is an amazing thing. If you start off with a fly by night cert in CT at 19 and have a string of dis-satisfied clients, things pop up in a google search 5 years later in GA. There are other jobs you can get that will pay better and won't make my industry look bad.

Wtf dude, whatever happened to people getting what they pay for?

[mydamnself]

Wtf dude, whatever happened to people getting what they pay for?

I get where you're going, but most people have no clue about training to begin with, and no idea how to select a competent trainer. You would think they would be smart enough to know a $30 per hour trainer is going to suck, but they just see a good deal.

[nickmanzoni]

What bothered me, and I don't know if this is because you've posted your resume on the internet but....


There are no factual pieces of information about your job, school, or experience.

What are you studying in school? WHERE is the gym that you work? Am I supposed to know what Cosi's is? That client stat data isn't something I'd even bother putting on. Because.... I'd need a before and after picture. And can you honestly not know that saying 110% is only 10% more than what the client can ACTUALLY do? You'd want to express anything under 200% or two times as much as simply a 10% strength increase. Or if you mean to say you increased strength by double in addition to 10% use 210%.

There's more, but that's enough.

[enz660]

hmmm...

Thanks for the suggestions, I'll make the appropriate changes and start applying next week.

[chrissydd]

I know you are young... but you really need to look and the wording of your resume... I will give you some inserts from resume...



Objective:

Pursuing marketing/sales employment opportunities with a progressive organization utilizing education, learned abilities, and strong communication and leadership skills.


Personal Attributes:

Determined, responsible, well-organized, can-do positive attitude, attention to detail,good communication and computer skills. Excellent work ethic and interpersonal andmanagement skills. Willing to learn.

Work Experience:

National Beverage Corp., May-July, 2007
Contract Account Manager for Pro Wakeboard Tour. Acworth, GA and Portland, OR.
Responsible for RipIt JX Series Sports Promotion. Duties included event planning, professional
athlete management, sport sponsorship, product positioning and local promotional activities.


Momentum Worldwide-Atlanta, January 2007-Present
Promotions and event intern. Planning, research, logistics management, reporting, program
support and execution duties. Responsible for 2007 DiGiorno Pizza Final Four promotion,
Wendy?s, and Febreeze (P&G) national campaigns; AmSouth/Regions Banks regional programs.
Executed 2007 Wendy?s National Taste Tour. Responsible for site selection, logistics, permitting
and operational management.